We all have our pet formulas. The go-to sources we love for great headline ideas.
For some it’s a swipe file full of head-turing advertising headlines. For others it’s scanning the headlines of their favorite magazines. Still others work their way through a set of templates like Jon Morrow’s Headline Hacks or Copyblogger’s Magnetic Headlines.
My old-standbys are the fifth chapter in a rugged copy of Tested Advertising Methods by John Caples and the four Us (unique, ultra-specific, useful, and urgent).
But write long enough and you’ll exhaust these sources and start looking for alternatives. Something to add a little juice to your headlines.
Having been in this business for nearly fifteen years I’ve worn out quite a few alternatives. And I’ve seen quite a few problems crop up, too.
Common headline formula mistakes
For instance, working your way through a set of templates is a great start to a great headline. But it’s not the same thing. You can’t plug in a few keywords and call it a day.
Let’s say Shannon Byrnes took “[Do something] just like a [world-class example]” and turned it into “Monitor Your Reputation Just Like a World-Class Sniper,” and called it a day.
That’s a stupid headline. And we all know it.
Because the magic is not in the formula. The magic comes from knowing what to put in those blanks — and what not to put in. For example, rookies tend to put in features rather than meaningful benefits.
I just saw this one today: “How to Create Epic Content.” There is a little curiosity behind that headline, but no benefit. It’s all feature. Instead, write “64 Ways to Destroy Your Competition with Epic Content (Before They Destroy You).” That’s not only useful, but it’s ultra-specific and unique. And a wee bit urgent.
And the magic comes in knowing what is unique among your audience. What they consider useful, urgent and meaningful. In other words, your audience comes first.
That’s what this article is all about.
Introducing the empathy map
In my time as a copywriter I’ve experimented with all kinds of methods that allow me to understand my audience. Recently, my favorite has been the empathy map.
This is a tool that allows your team to join the conversation that is going on inside your customer’s heart. It allows you to understand how they feel about you and your topic. It helps you uncover their pains, what they hope to gain.
On a macro level you can use this tool to flesh out the full-bodied picture of your ideal audience member. But you can use it on a micro level, too.
Start by drawing a simple empathy map like this:
Then walk through these steps.
1. What is she thinking?
Before they reach your article, what is your ideal reader thinking about? What problems do they need solved? How do they think about their fears and hopes? Do they hear positive feedback about your company and your blog from external sources?
Write things like: “If I work harder, success will come. I just need to put in more time. Study more headline books. Write more headlines. They will come. They should come.”
2. What is she seeing?
What does a typical day look like in her world? What does she see when she uses your product? What is the environment? What does she hear when other people use your product?
Write things like: “I sit in front of my laptop and look at the headlines I wrote yesterday and wonder what’s wrong with me. Those are horrible. They are boring. I’m just copying the templates. They aren’t unique.”
3. What is she feeling?
What do they say or feel when using your product, whether in private or public? When reading your blog posts? Following you on social media? Consuming your videos or Slideshares? How does she feel about her life? Career? Relationships with her parents or spouse? Ask questions relevant to your industry.
Write things like: “I deserve this. Hard work equals success. Why am I jealous of those who have the success I so desperately want? Why do I squirm with hatred when I see someone with a great headline over and over and over? Why are my efforts being frustrated?”
4. What is she doing?
Is she doing anything to overcome her obstacles? What are her obstacles? What options are available to her? How does she try to solve her problems? Does she throw her hands up in frustration (like a fatalist)? Or evaluate every product with a cocked eye (like a cynic)?
Write things like: “I want to be more productive, but I give up by the afternoon because I can’t come up with a good headline. I write headlines, but they’re all stupid. I want to feel like I have more freedom, and I am able to do the things I want to do, and I slave over headlines, but they are all stupid. I have a notebook full of stupid headlines.”
5. Pains
What keeps her up at night? What frustrates her? What are her obstacles she needs to overcome?
Write things like: “I don’t have the money to buy more headline books. And I don’t have anyone to look this over for me. Maybe if someone could mentor me. Or if there was a way I could get to know my audience. I can’t figure out how to know my audience.”
6. Gains
What does she hope to gain? What gets her out of bed in the morning?
Write things like: “I want to write a headline that people go nuts over. That’s sexy. Hot. People share it like crazy on Twitter. People can’t resist it. It’s like a Buzzfeed headline.”
Did you see what just happened?
During this simple exercise we were searching for trigger words such as frustrated, stupid, jealousy. Those could become part of your headline. You are searching for her language. You are searching for what she wants.
I have to confess that this exercise alone will not get you to a sexier headline. That comes by combining all your sources — by taking what you learned from the empathy map and running it through these magnetic headline formulas; playing with different arrangements to make it useful, unique, or ultra-specific; and peeking at a few hot headlines on your favorite magazines.
That’s exactly what I did with this article.
Remember, the more intimate you are with your reader, the more they’ll enjoy your article. And over time you won’t have to rely on this exercise for each headline or sales page you need to write. You’ll have a glossary full of ides on how they think, feel, see, things they say, pains they want to avoid, and gains they want to enjoy — an index loaded with resources you can harvest at anytime.
How to inform your empathy map
Let me close by answering that remaining question rumbling around in your head: how do I know what to write in my empathy map? I don’t know much about my ideal reader. If that’s you, here’s what you need to do:
- Ask your audience — Publish a post asking questions based upon the six categories of the empathy map. Direct your readers to reply via the comment section or by email.
- Conduct a survey — Create a quick form with Google Docs and share the link via your blog and social networks.
- Conduct interviews — Invite ten to fifteen to an individual in-depth interview.
- Consult your persona profiles — If you’ve already created personas, then most of the heavy lifting is already done for you.
The sources to help you understand your ideal reader are limitless. These are a great place to help you get started.
So, what do you think? Share your thoughts in the comments.
This article originally published on the Mention blog.
I like your avatar with the kids in the car better. It was also more empathetic.
I think you are right … I was after something a little newer. 😀
Informative post, Demian. I like the comment “the more intimate you are with the reader the more they’ll enjoy your article.” I find when I write posts from the heart, that are moving, I get more responses than less intimate posts. As a cartoonist, painter and writer, it’s hard for me to easily define my audience or what “problem” I’m solving. I feel more like I’m entertaining and offering some life advice. I just started a new blog, JohnPatrickWeiss.com and am slowly phasing out my old one at JohnPWeiss.com. I want readership beyond just artists, so hour post is helpful. Thanks.
Good to hear, John. And glad you liked that line. It’s an interesting story how I came up with it … maybe I’ll tell that story later.
I’ve used empathy maps before, but never thought about using one to create a headline. Another piece of brilliant advice!
Thanks Carrie!
Demian,
I now understand. You have to forgive me I’m just gathering nuts so that when I retire and become a better writer, because that’s what I’m looking forward to doing. What I understand is that you really have to take the time to think about what your reader wants, needs, and is it going to benefit them=)
No worries, Kimberly. And let me know how I can help.