When you say “data” few people perk up their ears. It’s a cold word that brings to mind row after row of zeros and ones. Yet you and I need data to help us make sound business decisions, uncover lost opportunities, and perfect our current efforts.
Data, however, can be overwhelming. Where to start? Who looks at it? What are you trying to accomplish? How much time do you have?
Compound this with the notion that you could be leaving money or valuable ideas on the table simply because you can’t or don’t have the resources necessary to mine that data, and the tension builds.
This is exactly the kind of problem that Ayasdi Iris claims to remedy.
Get Out of the Head–and Into the Heart
Ayasdi Iris says it’s a query-free insight discovery tool. In fact, it claims to be the world’s first “Insight Discovery Solution.”
In other words, software that will explore your data and find patterns and anomalies that can lead to insights.
Got it. But something just doesn’t quite feel right here. Have you picked up on it?
The problem is that at this point in their presentation we are still in the realm of the head. We are still in the abstract, non-concrete world of numbers, data, and software.
Who really gets excited about numbers, data, and software? I mean excited enough to drop several thousand dollars?
So, we need to get to the heart if we want people to care. If we want our copy to compel. If we want people to read every word we write.
Some might argue that because Ayasdi’s target audience is made up of scientists and business users–people who are stereotypically categorized as bent on logic and pragmatism–that heart issues won’t work on them.
That’s baloney. All humans use their emotions to make decisions.
How to Pluck Heart Strings
Explore Ayasdi’s website and you see they make a classic mistake when it comes to writing web copy: focusing on the features and not the benefits. You see what the product does, and you even get a sense that something big could happen with Ayasdi.
This is where they nail it with their explainer video. It opens with the problem, then agitates that problem, and finally slides into emotional territory: cancer and death.
This does two things.
- Raises the stakes – If you want people to care about your copy, then something has to be at risk. This is why we care so much about football. There is a winner and loser. The higher the stakes the more engagement you will get. This is why some books are ferocious page turners. A relationship is about to dissolve. A child is lost. A village is threatened.
- Hit close to home – You can’t go very far before running into someone who has either survived breast cancer, knows a breast cancer survivor or knows someone who has lost a battle with breast cancer. Nobody is immune to the effects of breast cancer.
This is real stuff with huge ramifications. Any worthwhile product should have these components. If they don’t, then you have a product that solves nothing meaningful.
Think about social media for a moment.
Most thinking adults would recognize the vapid nature of social media. Another distraction. Erodes personal and physical relationships. Leans toward useless entertainment.
But great marketers of social media overcame those objections by marching out meaningful benefits like connecting with old high school friends, communicating with parents deployed to foreign nations, and sharing photos of your children with distant relatives.
Heart strings type stuff. And that’s what you need to inject into your copy if you want it to be compelling and turn your readers on.
Don’t know what turns your prospects on? Here are four cheap ideas to get you started. And next week I’ll talk about more ways to raise the stakes.
See also in this series:
- Writing Clear Copy: The Only Rule You Need to Worry About
- The Art of Writing Concise Copy
- How Cancer and Death Can Make a Dull Product Irresistible